This is the first page of the first chapter of my novel, please tell me what you think?

When the craft landed in Chicago, it was raining. Normally, we tolerated rain, though upon this sold day, it angry me. we stared during the H2O drops trickling down the outrageous window panes of the categorical terminal, as well as hoped which Meaghan parked her automobile underground; sloshing by tiny puddles which shaped upon the dripping cement whilst lugging hulk suitcases around is not how we wish to begin off in the brand brand brand new city.
I stepped onto the escalator, as well as as it was starting down, my gawk landed upon the center elderly male in the black suit. There was something about him which seemed…off.
I was certain he hadn’t been upon the craft with me, though he’d been amongst the throng of people we got off with. The man carried the briefcase in the single palm as well as hold up the dungeon phone to his ear with another. He walked briskly, regularly gripping the integrate paces during the behind of me.
Our eyes met for the short moment, he looked divided fast as well as refocused his courtesy upon the chairman articulate upon the alternative line of his dungeon phone.
I stepped off the escalator. And with my trek swinging off my left shoulder, we hauled my wheeled container as well as duffel bags from the container explain as well as headed to the newcomer collect up area, scanning the throng for my brand brand brand new guardian, Meaghan.
“Evangeline!” we incited as well as saw the lady land the pointer which pronounced Evangeline Sanderson. She waved to me, smiling, indicating for me to come over.
Meaghan was zero similar to I’d imagined. I’d suspicion she would be the center age lady who’s regularly wearing the commercial operation fit as well as articulate upon her Blackberry. The kind who’s as well bustling with work to get tied together as well as have kids so they adopt. Well, until they comprehend how most the work the child can be. Then it all goes downhill from there.
Instead, Meaghan is the tiny blonde who looked hardly out of her teens; she could not have been some-more than twenty-five. She had vast immature eyes; shoulder length curls, as well as wore the black ditch coat, used jeans as well as cowboy boots.
“It’s great to see you, Evangeline,” Meaghan said. She grin tenderly during me though didn’t try to cuddle me.
“Meaghan,” we greeted her, giving her the tiny smile. we don’t wish to appear ungrateful to her for receiving me in when my encourage relatives took me behind to the amicable workman after the accident. They pronounced they couldn’t hoop the shortcoming of caring for the teenager which had left only by the NDP. When we woke up in the hospital, we knew I’m starting to be send to the brand brand brand new encourage home. So predictable.